Overall Story Issues:
- Is the story problem clear?
- Is the voice realistic and consistent?
- Does the voice sound right for the target audience? (Too young? Too old?)
- Does the chosen point of view create the right level of intimacy or distance for the story?
- Are there tantalizing questions? Or is everything being explained along the way?
- Has the story started in the right place?
- Does the character's situation continue to worsen, or is the author letting him off the hook and breaking tension?
- What does the character want in this scene?
- What's the conflict?
- Does the character's emotion change or remain the same throughout the scene?
- Are the descriptions multi-sensory or primarily visual?
- Is too much information being shared? Can some of it be revealed later?
- Does the scene move the story forward? Is it necessary?
- Does the scene go on too long? Should it end earlier? Should it be split in two?
- Is the pace dragging anywhere?
- Does a given section feel like it's gone on for too long and should it be condensed?
- Is there too much narrative?
- Too much backstory?
- Too much telling?
- Is there enough character emotion?
- Is the character well-rounded? Flawed?
- Is the dialogue realistic?
- Is the character consistent in his speech, actions, and responses to stimuli?
- Does the character evoke reader empathy in some way?